Post #8 Show Don't Tell

Hello. 

     Welcome back.

     You've no doubt heard this before.  When writing, SHOW Don't TELL.

     It's another rule to help you become the respected author you want to be.   Check your book of Tools.  Rules 22, 27, and 38.

     TELL: (no)  "My brother is talented."

     Don’t just TELL me your brother is talented.  SHOW me.  Your reader should decide if he's talented. 

     SHOW: (yes)  "My brother restores Model T Fords, is a stand in for Brad Pitt, and just yesterday played 18  holes under par over at the Wilshire Country Club, with only his seven iron." 
     Now you have your reader saying, “Wow, now there's one talented guy.”

     When you make a statement, back it up with examples. 

     TELL: (no)  “I'm a hard worker.”
     Unengaging and unconvincing.  It has no persuasive force.
         
     SHOW: (yes)  "I'm up at five to write while I'm fresh, catch the 720 Metro at seven to get to work, selling commodity futures. I get back about six for an hour or two going over the rewrites for my tenth book.  Hell, I don't even have time to eat."

     This is much more persuasive, don't you think?

     TELL: (no)  "I would have to say that Ping-Pong is my favorite sport.

     SHOW: (yes)   "Ping-Pong may look like fun, a beer in one hand a paddle in the other, but for champions like myself, winning requires me to be a real athlete.  Sometimes it feels like a life or death proposition.  It's one heck of a work out.  It's my life."

***

     Here’s a sentence that tells:

     TELL: (no)  The boy wore old clothes.

     Boring

     SHOW: (yes)   The back pockets of the boy's jeans had been removed to supply material for patches in the knees, and where the pockets had been were the unfaded squares of blue denim.  (Thieves' Market,  A.I. Bezzerides).

     Not boring. 

     And as a writer, there is nothing worse than to be called boring.  NOTHING.

***

     How about Metaphors and Similes to SHOW (yes).

     TELL: (no)   He rumbled through the crowd.

     SHOW: (yes)  Like a bull elephant he pushed the others out of his path, forcing his way toward the crowded break room, hoping beyond hope that somebody had the good sense to make a fresh pot of coffee.

     TELL: (no)  She quietly looked through the window.

     SHOW: (yes)  Like a weightless butterfly gliding up to the window, she lit silently on the sill, and peered inside.

     TELL: (no)  He sat there with a bag of chips. 

     Boring.

     This creates a limited image.  (Okay, Ernest Hemingway might get away with sentences like this, but we're not Ernest Hemingway).

     SHOW: (yes)  He stared into the bag of Doritos, shook it, and smelled it's aroma.  With a huge smile, he cradled the bag in his arms like a baby.  Try to take it away from him, you’re in for a fight, twisting away, "Hey.  Get your own.  This is MINE!"

     Not boring.

***

     Answer the questions your readers are asking. 

     TELL: (no) "I'm not worthy."

     Your readers are asking, "Okay why aren't you worthy?  What have you done to become unworthy?  Who are you?"

     SHOW: (yes)  "Every time I get up on stage I forget my lines, and once I look out into the audience, I feel so stupid.  I'm such a screw up.  It's like I want to throw up.  Really."

     The more of these questions you answer, the more you SHOW (yes) instead of TELL (no), the more interesting your writing will be.  The more readers you'll have.  The more books you'll sell.

     Keep going with the first 6 Posts.  It's hard work, but you're building the solid foundation you need.  

     Until next time...

     Together we can get this done.

     Later.

Post #7 My own Pomodoro Technique

Welcome back. 

     For first timers, go back to Posts  #1 through #6.  That's all you need to become a respected author.  It's your one year apprenticeship.  If you have any questions about how I became a published author let me know in the comments.

     Let's discuss Natalie's Book, (Post #3).  How do you do what she asks?  Write non-stop for fifteen minutes?  Sounds simple.  After reading it the first time, I thought, hell, fifteen minutes, come on.  First time I tried it, I wrote non-stop for a full two hours.  Just kept writing, didn't stop.  8 pages.  Nothing to this.  I felt inspired.

      That day I typed my handwritten scrawl into my laptop when I got back to my loft.  That's when I saw it.  Around page four my rough handwriting started repeating itself, and I began to lose focus, adding words like, 'focus, focus, focus,' and  'just keep your hand moving, moving, moving.'  I lost my direction pages five through 8.  Something was wrong.  I wasn't adding anything new.  Was five pages my limit?  I wanted to write so much more.  

     It was exciting my first day, writing in my spiral notebook, but the next day I only wrote for an hour, a struggle to finally finish eight pages.  The days that followed, my enthusiasm certainly dropped.  It wasn't all that much fun anymore, but hell, I had to do it.

     So I sat back, pulled out my cell phone and Goggled 'How to focus while writing,' hoping for a solution.  Fortunately, I stumbled upon The Pomodoro Technique.  Just in time since I felt a low grade headache approaching, page one in my notebook staring up at me, blank.      

      Essentially this technique eliminates burnout, eliminates the problem of procrastination, and OMG it also helps prevents writer's block.   Natalie uses something similar.  She writes for 15 minutes then takes a break. 

      Pomodoro?  It's Italian for tomato.  Tomato?  Yeah, tomato.  It comes from a kitchen timer!  You've seen them, (Check the picture).  It’s shaped like a small tomato with numbers around the top.  Twist  it to 10, come  back 10 minutes later,  it dings.  To prevent stares, at the coffee shop I use my cell phone. 

    The Pomodoro System breaks down work into 25 minute intervals, a five minute break, then back to work. 

    So I tested it for a couple of days to see if this would work for me.  I was working on the background for my major characters for my next book, Muscles in Red Wine.  I was starting to lose my steam, my excitement, plotting out the story.  But this system got me going again.  The notebook didn't feel so heavy walking up to the coffee shop. 

    After experimenting for a week, I developed my own system. 

      30 minutes (non-stop writing) then a 5 minute break.  A second 30 minutes then increasing to a 10 minute break, then 30, and 15 break.  I continued with 15 minute breaks until I finished 8 pages in my notebook.  (Pomordoro30)

     During the breaks, I relaxed.  Nothing mental.  Just stared out the window.  My suggestion;  If you’re in a coffee shop, look up at the other people, say hello, maybe even, (shall I say it?)  smile.   Me, after saying hello, I do my eye exercises.  Yep.  Blinking, distant looking, exercise the up and down muscles in your eyes.  Your eyes take a beating staring into a computer screen.  (FYI, there's a free App for these exercises).   

     And it worked.  My notebook scrawl didn't degenerate into repetitive crap after page 5.  An obvious improvement.  And no headaches.  Enthusiasm rekindled.  I was excited to find a simple solution to something many writers dread.    

      It's a LifeHack, a trick to get stuff done. This system also works for your reading.  It keeps your mind fresh.  Holds your enthusiasm.  Rewards you with those increasing breaks. 

     Check it out.  Writers have to read and write.  Try this.  It works for me. 

     Until next time.   Together we can get this done.

     Later...

Post #6 SUMMARY of Posts #1 - #5

     If this is your first visit, and you want to become a respected author, then go back and read posts one through five.  My system is fully explained.  It will save you years of time.

      For everyone else, let me summarize.  (Remember if you have any questions,  or you think I'm headed for a crash, please add your comments.  I'll do my best to get us back on the straight and narrow.)
 
     (Not that you're a horse, but...)  I've led you to water...
 
     Everything you need is here.  From now on, it's up to you.  I've given you all the tools you'll need, plus enough to build your race course.  The finish line is there, it's up to you to get out there and run.   

     To be a writer, you have to write.  Creating a Blog, allows you to write, but with that little extra.  Knowing your words will be read by the entire world, you'll think about what you've written. 

     It won't just be words in a spiral notebook, uncopied, misspellings, half sentences, confused thoughts.  A Blog forces you rewrite what you've done.  Pride takes over. 

     "People are going to read this, so I gotta get this to make some kind of sense."

     For the newbie, once you press, 'Publish,' you can now call yourself a writer.  "I'm a writer, check out my blog."  (Make it your best.)

      If you can find a more interesting way to practice writing, please tell me.  My first blog, where I practiced, was StiffLeftJab.com, a sports blog. After a year and 96 posts, I stared writing short stories.  (Flower Street Melodramas).

     If you haven't got your Blog up and running, get busy.  (Blogger or WordPress.  They're free).   And if you're nervous about writing under your own name, come up with a pen name.  I did.  My first blog was written under the name Cornelius Butterfield. 

     No NFL coach will start a high school QB in his season opener.  (Probably against NFL rules, anyway,) but you get the idea.  Same here.  You have to go through an apprenticeship.  Follow my posts.  It’s one year.  Only then will an agent read beyond your first paragraph.

     Keep reading.  (Post #3)  You have to get the flow, the rhythm, the words in your head. 

     My schedule.  (You might have to improvise. I'm retired so scheduling my day is no problem.)  If you get away from FaceBook, and Twitter, you'll free up plenty of time.

    I write (#2) at a coffee shop every morning, 6:30-9am.  About eight pages, hand written, (Goldberg # 3).  When I get home, I type it into my laptop.  Eight pages becomes three.  When I've typed about 10 pages, about three days’ worth, I print it and rewrite it at the coffee shop the next morning.  Once it 'sounds right,' (#5), I start over and write the next ten pages. 

     This blog is important in another way.  When you're writing (your book, a year from  now,)  and you come down with writer’s block, just pour another shot of Sailor Jerry's in your coffee, go to your blog and start typing.  It's where you go when you’re ‘Blocked,’ rather than doing something ruinous; ice cream, chocolate, shopping, surfing Ebay for shoes, dreaming about winning the PowerBall.

     Bottom Line: You do this and you'll become a writer.  It will change how you look at the world.  "I can't wait to get this down on paper."  You'll see people as characters, this would make a good story, how would I write that so my readers will feel just like I did?  Regardless, fiction or non-fiction. 

     So you're writing. (Blogging).

     You're reading.  (Your favorite author).

     You're studying your two books. (Taking notes).

     You're on your way.  This is your one year apprenticeship.  The clock is ticking. 

     This blog will now post every few days.  It will be my ideas, my thoughts, how I’m working out my problems, as I writing my next book, 'Muscles in Red Wine.'

     Together we can get this done.

     Later...
    

Post #5 The final piece of the writing puzzle

     The one last piece to the puzzle.   You have to read.

     And read, and read, and read some more.  
  
     I began reading mysteries, primarily Perry Mason, in the seventh grade.  Since then, it's been detective mystery fiction.  I read primarily pulp authors.  1920-1935.

     My challenge is to bring that style to the present day, without all the noir.  Without the guns, without the fights, killers, drunks, without the dames with brass knuckles.  A modern hero, college educated, keeping his head down.  Think James Gardner's Rockford, not Joe Pesci's Nicky Santoro (Casino).  Sherlock Holmes without the morphine and cocaine.  Think Hannibal Lectre turn good guy, without the cannibalism, the weird speech and that hockey mask.  

     He's/She's a lover rather than a fighter, but none the less strong and forceful, certainly not boring, (the death knell for any author.)  He thinks through the problems, rather than simply leading with a stiff left jab.  But he's still not perfect.  (Maybe he's trying to conquer this thing he has for watching too many F-Troop reruns?)  To be honest, I'd like him to be as exciting as Hannibal is scary!

     So, here what I did and still do, and I suggest you do the same.

    Read half an hour (minimum) every day.   Facebook, Twitter, can wait 'til later.

    You want to find authors (fiction or non-fiction) that you like to read.  Then read everything by that author you can find.  The more you read their style the more their style will lodge in your brain. 

     Why read?

     You're looking for a style you like.  The way you'd like to write.  So when you write, then read it back, you'll know when it sounds, 'right.'   Does it sound like what you've been reading?   It'll never sound exactly the same.  Your own personal style will develop.   Just keep reading it back until it sounds, 'right.'  You'll know.

     Next find your genre.  Is it non-fiction, children books, murder mystery, cozy mystery, erotica, adventure/thriller, Sci-Fi?   Whatever.  Go to Amazon/books and check their list of genres.  There's a ton.  Most likely though, you'll follow your favorite author's genre.  People buy books by genre, so you have to find one.

      Try this.  I found books at the library of short stories.  (Mine where Black Mask stories, detective stories, pulp mysteries.)  Chose authors with a style you like.  Then find and read their books.  You're looking for your writing style.  Right now I'm reading a book by Rich Cohen, about the 1985 Chicago Bears, 'Monsters.'  I don't usually read non-fiction, but I like his style.  He follows the '50 Tools.' (Blog #4)

      One thing to remember.  Most books have been professionally edited, so they will sound way beyond your present ability, "I'll never be able to write this good.  It’s impossible.  Why did I ever think I could...”

     Stop.

     Most books take years to write.  Not only that, many are written by groups of writers, with the famous author's name on the cover, so it sells.  Don't think you can't do it.  You can.  I did.  Just this way.

      So, find your author and genre, and read as much as you can.  You want to lock that style in your head.  Simple as that.  You have to read, and read, and read some more. 

     And that's it! 

     Next Blog post is the summary.  I'll go over it all again.   All 5 posts.  Trust me, it's all you'll need. 

     Together we can get this done.

     Later...

Post # 4 How to get it down on paper (WordPad)

      Hello everybody.   Welcome back.
 
     Took a break Saturday, and visited the LA Zoo with my daughter and grandson.  The day turned out to be perfect.  I didn't want to leave, but now I'm home and ready to continue with my promise to make you a published author.

     Got my Kraken and ginger ale, and a spoonful of peanut butter (Organic, smooth), so I'm all set.  (Top Ramen at the ready.)  So, let's do this.

    To become a writer, you have to get your thoughts down on to paper; or spiral notebook, or WordPad/Notepad. 

      Post # 3 gave you one of the two books you'll need.   Here is the other.

      'Writing Tools.  50 essential Strategies for Every Writer,'   by Roy Peter Clark.  (Buy it, or check it out from your library.)

     Here's how this book will help you.  The author claims writers are made not born.  I think he's right.  Writing is a craft you can learn.  You need tools not rules.   There's only 50 tools, that you can use every day.  With these tools you'll become more affluent, and effective, you'll write with a purpose, and a plan. 

     The book is broken up into four sections.

     First Section.  NUTS AND BOLTS. 
          1.  Begin sentences with subject and verbs.
          2.  Order words for emphasis.
          3.  Activate your verbs.
...and on.

     Second Section:  SPECIAL EFFECTS.
          11.  Prefer the simple over the technical.
          12.  Give key words their space.
          13.  Play with words even in serious stories.
...and on.

     Third Section:  BLUEPRINTS.
          24.  Work with a plan.
          25.  Learn the difference between reports and stories.
          26.  Use dialogue as a form of action.
...and on.

     Fourth Section:  USEFUL HINTS.
          40.  Draft a mission statement for your work.
          41.  Turn procrastination into rehearsal.
          42.  Do your homework well in advance.
...and on to 50.

      That's a taste of what this book is all about.  It gets you organized and makes you sound like you know what you're doing as a writer.  Turns you into a professional.  I made a two page summary of this book, and I read it over every Monday morning before I begin to type.

      First time visitors here, who are serious about becoming professionals, should go back to post #1, and catch up with us.

     Your assignment; Get this book.  I suggest a quick read through, then go back and study each tool.  50 days?  Might take more.  l read the whole thing  twice a year. 

     Next Post, #5, I'll give you the final piece in the puzzle.  I do it every day, when I'm finished with typing.

     But Max, I don't want to buy books, I want to start writing.  Well,  Good Luck.  How many high school football players go directly into the NFL.  None that I know of.  Don't they first go through four years of college ball, with managers, coaches, acquire agents?   Your book, off the top of your head,  becoming a NY Times Best Seller?  How serious are you?

     Come back for Post #5, and get the final piece to the puzzle.
 
     Together we can get this done
 
     Later...
         
           
    

Post #3 Writing without Stopping!

Welcome back

    So, are we ready to continue?   You've made the decision to do this.    There's no second thoughts.  There's no turning back.  There's no, "I'll get started on this sometime tomorrow."  (See Blog #1)

     It's Onward and Yonward! 

     From this moment, it's eat, sleep, think writing. That's what you've signed on for.  You've limited your time on Facebook, and Twitter.  (Very important).   You carry a small notebook in your pocket for those ideas that are there (Yes!) and then (Damn!) gone in an instant.  You lie awake thinking up characters, and situations.  Fiction, non-fiction, poetry, doesn't matter.  You're thinking about writing.

    And by now you've got your blog up and running.  If not, get that started right away.  

   "But, Max, I don't want to do any blog.  I got this terrific book idea..."

   There is no magic pill.  You have to write and write, and write some more.  (See Blog #2) 

     "Okay, I get it, so how do I do this?"     

    There are thousands of books on how to write.  I use only two.  I've read my share, but only two stand out.  I read each every six months. 

     We'll start with, 'Writing Down the Bones,' by Natalie Goldberg.  Get this book and read it.  Takes about an hour or two.  Let me tell you how I use her book.

     I walk up to a coffee shop near Flower Street here in Downtown LA.  I get my coffee, open my spiral notebook, sit, pick up my pen, put my head down, and write.

     Natalie writes in fifteen minute chunks, then sits back and rests for a few minutes.  Then writes for another fifteen.

     I wrote, when I started,  for an hour.  Then stopped for about fifteen minutes, got up, walked outside, talked with the regulars, then sat back down and wrote for another hour.

     Natalie recommends writing with a pen, and paper, not laptop  or android.  She says it has to do with a hand/eye/brain connection.  It might be that she grew up before word processors, so she's more comfortable with a pen in her hand.  So I write with a pen.  

      Here's the thing.  Your hand can't stop!  That's the way it's done.  You write for fifteen minutes, without stopping.   You just continue to write.

     Took me a few days to write without stopping, without looking up.  But that's how I do it today.  This was four years ago.  I go up to that coffee shop every morning at 5:30am.  I write for an hour when there aren't many people around.  Then about seven I do another hour.  I socialize for half an hour after that.  Then walk back to my loft and type in into my laptop.  That's how I do it.

    I'm done about noon.

    Two hours of writing at the coffee shop, yields about eight pages.  This translates into about three pages when I get back and type it into my laptop. 

     When you can't stop the pen, you’re going to have sentences like, 'And why am I doing this...A man has just walked in with a funny hat...Who is this lady, in the high heels...' Obviously, I delete those sentences, plus any duplications, and those sentences I just can't read, too scribbly.  I get the essence into the laptop.

    Write and write and write some more. 

    It's tougher if you work eight to five, you have to find the time during the day.   Before work?  After work?  On the MetroLink.  Ten minutes here, 20 minutes there.  It all adds up.

   Just remember, if it's only fifteen minutes, write without stopping.  DO NOT WORRY ABOUT WHAT YOU’RE WRITING, just focus on an idea.  And don't stop.  After a few fifteen minute writing periods, you'll have something that moves your story, or your blog post, forward. 

    For my first blog, StiffLeftJab.com I checked sports sites on the Web, early in the morning, found an odd story, then fit the facts into my cast of characters.  In one I had Pete Rose in the back of a taxi cab talking about his life, with taxi cab driver, Diego Garcia, one of my main characters.  He was always eavesdropping on big time athletes he'd picked up at LAX.

     That's what I did, 500 words a day, one post every three days, for one year.  

     So, get Natalie’s book.  Read it.  It will get you started.
   
     Next blog, we'll discuss the other book, the one that will show you how to get it down on paper.

     Later...

     

Post #2 Those who said YES, let's get started.

Welcome back. 

     Now that you've answered YES to the question:  Do I REALLY want to be a writer, what next?

    When I made the commitment to write, I Googled,   'How to Write.'  The consensus: Write, write, and (you guessed it), write some more.  You can't get around it.  There's no magic pill.  You have to simply write.

     My solution, so it didn't feel like drudgery, and I had something to show for it,  I started a BLOG.

     I went to Blogger.com, and opened up a blog.  Do it.  It takes half an hour or so.  Decide on a name, and a subject.  And begin typing.  Costs about a dollar a month.  Mine was StiffLeftJab.com, a blog about sports. 

      That's how I practiced.  Got started.  Fiction.  I set up a cast of characters, and through them, discussed what was going on in the world of sports.  I wrote and wrote, and wrote some more. 

       Fiction, non-fiction, poetry, blank verse, it really doesn't matter.  1200 words every three days.  My blog lasted one year, 96 posts.  To learn it, you have to do it.  (I even came up with a pen name.  I didn't want anybody to know what I was up to.  Brentwood Belair).

     My apprenticeship.  With sports I always had something to write about, and it was fun.  My undergraduate work.

     I didn't get a ton of readers.  Sports fans, I told myself, are more interested in betting on sports than reading about it?  But I didn't care.  I knew why I was doing it.  To learn how.  Like any other profession, you have to learn the ropes, see if you have the determination, the patience, see if you love doing it.  1200 words every three days, demanding, for a year.  Your test.

     Once you publish your first post, you can call yourself a writer.  Your words are being published worldwide.  People in Sidney, London, The Bronx will be hanging on your every word.   A recipe blog, a dog or cat blog, what you do everyday blog.  Doesn't matter.  Just WRITE, (post pictures, write captions).  Regardless of the number of viewers, the number of comments, the number of subscribers.  Just WRITE.  WRITE.  And WRITE some more.

     (Beside my old blog, StiffLeftJab.com, check out, 'Busblog,' and 'Raymi the Minx,' for ideas.)

     Your assignment;  Set up a blog.  Do it.  It won't take long.  You'll be so happy you did.  Have fun with it.

     Okay, next time, I have two, 'How to,' books I use.  They're the only ones I use. 

     (My first book's for sale on Amazon.  "Flower Street Melodramas.'  Buy it!   12 short stories.  If you like them, I'd appreciate a good review.  Thanks)

     Together we can get this done!

     Later...